I sell antique and vintage patterns (amongst other items), although not doll things, and I honestly had no idea what your title meant, except something possibly to do with Barbie dolls. I see a title on another one of your items that reads:
Plastic Canvas Pattern Book to make Fashion Doll Dream Camper Barbie
Is this the same one, revised? This version does make more sense. Stringing nouns together without adjectives, prepositions or verbs can make for confusing reading, as in your first post here. If I were listing this item (now that I see what it is from the photo), I might even say:
"Pattern Book to make plastic canvas 'Dream Camper' for Barbie doll"
...or something to that effect. I find that putting trade names or product names in single quotes helps to separate the descriptive part of the title from the proprietary names and make the whole title more understandable at first glance. Also, for what it's worth, I'd use initial capital letters selectively, i.e. not on every word. Avoid all caps, there seems to be information around that Cassini doesn't like them.
Since Barbies are fashion dolls, probably anyone interested in this won't need the "Fashion Doll" desription anyway. Sometimes it's possible to get so hung up trying to be all-inclusive with eBay listing titles that we forget to use clear English. I always ask myself: will someone with no knowledge of this category understand what I'm selling?
I'm wondering why your description text is so sparse? There are probably at least 4 or 5 points you could include, and maybe a bit of marketing excitement, to make it worthwhile having a description frame - just my opinion.
